Feedback From First Draft

After a showing of the first draft, we received both positive and negative feedback, to help us improve the opening further. 


Positive feedback we received:

- In the opening there is a good range of camera shots and angles which make it interesting and relate to the characters well.

- The storyline and genre is made clear, which helped really helped by the codes and conventions that we have put in place

- The titles we have used are clear and smart, and fit in well with the opening and don't look out of place.


The negative feedback we received will now help us to improve the film. From the feedback we now know we need to sort the following:

- The diegetic audio is uneven in place, so we need to level out the audio, by increasing/ decreasing audio gain on each clip so all clips match each other. Also music underneath speech needs to be made quieter to make the dialogue really clear. 

- The establishing shot is slightly shaky, so this needs to be stabilised in premiere pro.

- The fire effect needs to track the hand movement better as it looks to unrealistic at the moment.

- Some shots of Jess and Zoe need to be shortened slightly to make sure we keep the audience's attention throughout.

- Music needs to be re -written in places to make it less repetative, as it makes the opening too boring otherwise.

Title Card: Editing

From the very beggining of our opening, we want to convey the conventions/ codes of the super hero genre. For this, as detailed earlier we have made a title card which is very simmilar to Marvel's title card.

This will make the audience recognise what genre the film is going to be straight away. For this I made the title in photoshop, which was a simple collection of font put together.

After this I exported each layer separatley as a photoshop file, this way I can animate the title in Premiere pro.

After this I imported the files into premiere pro, and combined it with pictures and music. By putting movement in the background and forground separetely, I was able to create something simmilar to the marvel title card.

Below is a copy of the title card finished with music and a copy of the distribution company's logo (Momentum Pictures)